Mano's Shell

For all your Maplestory™ needs.


You are not connected. Please login or register

Just something at the top of my head.

View previous topic View next topic Go down  Message [Page 1 of 1]

1 Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 1:04 pm

Poakintins

avatar
Moderator
Well, there's no topic, but... Here goes.

As I was running, I kept looking back to see if it was still chasing me. It was. I ran faster, or so I thought I had been, because nothing seemed to change for distance between us. The creature that was chasing me was wretched. It had four arms, two legs, and a look that meant it wanted to brutally murder something. That something was me.

I continued running, but it felt like my power was going to drain out completely soon. My eyes lazily studied the area around me. I'm in a forest... I thought to myself. And it's still chasing me. I can hear it.
I continued running and panting, when suddenly, I fell. I screamed. I looked up, and the creature was glaring at me from the top of the hill where I fell, then crept off. I was falling. It was a big drop, so I was stunned. I remembered I had some type of cloth in my bag, so it was worth a try. I quickly opened my bag and snatched the giant cloth out of my bag. Sadly, other things of mine fell out of my bag, falling to the pits I was about to die in.

I grabbed the fabric with both hands, then yanked it above my head. A gush of air burst into my lungs, almost suffocating me. Then after a few seconds, I was floating to the bottom of the pit. I noticed that the pit also had a river going through it, and it seemed like I was about to fall into it. I careened myself away from the water, because I did not know what lurked within its waters. After a minute or so, I carefully landed on some of the rocky areas in the pit.

I felt hopeless and stuck. I looked to my left, then right. There was a passageway both ways. I didn't which way to choose. The left way lead back to the forest, where that wretched creature almost killed me, and to the right...? Nobody knew. Nobody has ever went to that place and come back alive... I didn't know what to do, so I began to cry.

After a few minutes, I heard the growl that the creature made, and quickly looked to the left. Dammit! It chased me here! After figuring out that I was it's only prey, I sprinted to the right. If I were going to die, I would rather discover something for myself. After a few minutes of sprinting, I kept seeing posts saying things like "Turn back" and "Warning!" I decide to ignore them, because that creature was still hot on my tail.

I was exhausted. I thought I was just going to fall any minute, then just wait for death to come. But instead, the creature looked around, then at me with large eyes of fear, and sprinted off. I fell to the ground, then passed out.

END OF CHAPTER ONE.
You guys think I should continue? Razz



Last edited by Boris on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:51 pm; edited 3 times in total

View user profile

2 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 1:31 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
this gives me an idea
also you should seperate it into smaller paragraphs, it might just be my ipod but that one looks huge



this is a signature
View user profile

3 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 1:55 pm

Poakintins

avatar
Moderator
Oooh right. I forgot about paragraphs. Yeah, iPods tend to make me forget.. *Le fixes or whatever*??



That's what she said. Wink
View user profile

4 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:16 pm

continue it it's good caught my attention like good books should

View user profile

5 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:27 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
story*, not book. books usually have bindings, pages... and are real. this is a STORY



this is a signature
View user profile

6 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:47 pm

Boris

avatar
Moderator
I further edited your post to make the paragraphs more distinct.
Indentation doesn't work on the forum.



"A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new."
― Albert Einstein
View user profile

7 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:48 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
just use the space key multiple times. not everyonelikes looking at blocks of text



this is a signature
View user profile

8 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:52 pm

Boris

avatar
Moderator
That's what I mean.
No amount of spaces will make it indented.
LMFAO.



"A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new."
― Albert Einstein
View user profile

9 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:55 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
____just pretend the line isn't there



this is a signature
View user profile

10 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 4:57 pm

Boris

avatar
Moderator
It must be your iPod, as I've separated the paragraphs with returns.
LMFAO.



"A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new."
― Albert Einstein
View user profile

11 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 5:05 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
i know, it looks weird



this is a signature
View user profile

12 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 5:13 pm

Boris

avatar
Moderator
I just checked on my iPod.
It doesn't look weird at all.
LMFAO.



"A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new."
― Albert Einstein
View user profile

13 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 5:15 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
i'm not saying it looks weird on my ipod, it looks weird generally



this is a signature
View user profile

14 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 5:17 pm

Boris

avatar
Moderator
It's not even that bad.
As long as you can see the paragraphs...
You're just being picky.
LMFAO.



"A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new."
― Albert Einstein
View user profile

15 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 5:19 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
...that's the point.



this is a signature
View user profile

16 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 5:22 pm

Boris

avatar
Moderator
Well, isn't that captious of you?
LMFAO.



"A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new."
― Albert Einstein
View user profile

17 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 5:23 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
i like cream cheese on warm bread

[Moderator] Irrelevant.



this is a signature
View user profile

18 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 6:15 pm

Gus

avatar
Admin
So you were being chased by Boris? LMFAO.



Seems legit...
View user profile http://manoshells.forumotion.com

19 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 6:30 pm

kitty

avatar
Moderator
screw the mods. you see char bumping threads and don't do anything?



this is a signature
View user profile

20 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 6:39 pm

Boris

avatar
Moderator
He's Char.
He's a special case.
LMFAO.



"A person who never made a mistake never tried anything new."
― Albert Einstein
View user profile

21 Re: Just something at the top of my head. on Sat Jun 02, 2012 7:57 pm

btw kitty i meant the story caught my attention like some of the good books i've read lol

View user profile

Sponsored content


View previous topic View next topic Back to top  Message [Page 1 of 1]

Permissions in this forum:
You cannot reply to topics in this forum